Writing Well

I am not the only person concerned about poor writing in business: http://qz.com/522824/jack-dorseys-jargon-free-firing-memo-edited-to-remove-the-jargon/. 

I think that the suggested revisions improve the memo and that additional revisions would make it even better. Additional revisions would improve the focus of the memo and replace colloquialisms with plain speech. Follow this link to see the additional revisions I suggest: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1knMJUDHD4tbNqiBPmCbKNLFKWEDId_2hQqD2qFXGJNg/edit?usp=sharing.